Tuesday, March 27, 2012

Show Not Tell Darius & Marvin

Foot by foot we climbed the stair case which, lead us in to a dark hole which had a flow of water. As we plunged down the pitch black hole we felt the water rushing against our body. Then there was a light that lead out to a splash of water which went straight into my face. Can you guess what we are talking about???? Well we are not telling.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Darius.....

    This sounds like such a very interesting show not tell. I like it how you and Marvin opened your paragraph with foot by foot! And it is also good how you used the words pitch black hole! Keep up the good work.
    From Kayde